Talk:First Battle of Gaza
Latest comment: 31 October 2023 by Mporter in topic "Five cities of the Palestine Alliance"
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Too many words, too much detail
What actually happened and why is buried under a mountain of minor "facts". Needs simplyfying into the main what, why, how to make it meaningful and readable. Rcbutcher (talk) 09:10, 26 September 2015 (UTC)
- Gday, yes I agree with that. User:RoslynSKP has been one of the main contributors; however, they are currently no longer active (in this field at least). Anotherclown (talk) 09:26, 26 September 2015 (UTC)
Does the first sentence of the lead actually make sense?
I'm reluctant to mess with it while it's on the front page but...
- "during the first attempt by the Egyptian Expeditionary Force (EEF), which was a British Empire military formation, formed on 10 March 1916 under the command of General Archibald Murray from the Mediterranean Expeditionary Force and the Force in Egypt (1914–15), at the beginning of the Sinai and Palestine Campaign of the First World War" - during the first attempt to do what? The sentence wanders off into an explanation of the EEF and appears to have lost its object? KJP1 (talk) 11:38, 26 March 2023 (UTC)
"Five cities of the Palestine Alliance"
This odd expression presumably refers to the five cities of Philistia. Mporter (talk) 04:19, 31 October 2023 (UTC)